Can you give me a little critism?

[color=red][SIZE=24px][font=times new roman]I recently wrote this song and want to know what you think.[/font][/SIZE][/color] Here it is...... He was the most feces fecal matter investigator.He was my poo,
My feces poo,
My fecal matter investigator.We used to taste so well together,
Back then.
We wanted to love together, around the world,
We wanted it all.But one poopa, one hairy poopa,
We decided to love too much.
Together we pooped a poop.
It was smelly, so smelly.From that moment our relationship changed.
He grew so big.And then it happened:Oh no! Oh no!He poopy a poo.
Alas, a poo!
My poo poopy a poo.
It was yummy, so yummy.The next day I thought my bottom had broken,
I thought my jaw had burst into flames,
(But I was actually overreacting a little.)But still, he is in my thoughts.
I think about how it all changed that poopa,
That hairy poosday poopa.My jaw... ouch!
When I think of that feces fecal matter investigator,
That feces fecal matter investigator and me.
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My new personal record for "weirdest WTF moment."I think it's funny, but you might not want to publish that on disc. Publishing it on the Internet would be fine, but...

Ugh

treec_cynda · #2My new personal record for "weirdest WTF moment."I think it's funny, but you might not want to publish that on disc. Publishing it on the Internet would be fine, but...

Thanks

Replying to #3

Ugh

It's loathsome and I don't want to hear any more of it.P.S. Don't forget to use toilet paper.

Poooooooooop!!