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This thread is for poems. Yep, poems. If you have one post it, allow the uses to see your daft wordplay and spectacular speech craft skills.Some rules-
**Keep the profanity to a minimum, the less the better.
**Sexual innuendos should be left somewhere else.
**Don't bash or flame someone's poetry.
**Critiquing is allowed, only constructive criticism though.
**Don't plagiarize some one elses work and claim it for your own." No Umbrella"
It's nothing I wanted to tell you
the cascading moments fleeing into the past
I never knew you wanted to know,
and I never dreamed you'd ever ask.So the questions revolve around a moment
the one that echoes why
at that time I was enveloped in misery
and in the bed of thorns is where I would lie,I no longer question it
I had this answer,already known
at that very moment
miles away,the princess took her throne.It's sappy, but so am I.
C
Time to dig up my old thread post then....
Cahos Rahne VelozaWell now, I recently uncovered several of my "lost" literary compositions from 15 or so years ago, back in my old "I hate the world & wanna die" phase ;D, while I was rummaging through my stuff looking for some old pics when I was still a young angst filled teen, & I thought, "Why not post 'em for the rest of the world to critique", good & bad remarks are welcomed guys :)Child
C.R.V.Farewell divine & honest glee,
The glory that was within me,
Beginnings of all Humanity,
My Child, My Child, Now go and Flee!
May your strength stay with thee,
Stay forth unto infinity.My Child, My Child, Now I set you free!
Never again shall you be unhappy,
Free from the voices of Man's society,
Never again, anyone dare to envy,
No longer bound by his jealousy,
Farewell my Child, You are no longer me!The Cube
C.R.V.What makes thee so right and quaint?
What is it you hide inside,
Out of sight, amidst the blur,
Perfection, is it all that's there?
Never giving off, whatever's wrong.
Or is it, that things are void:
In one point, existence is clear,
In reality...
Nothing exists.Prey
C.R.V.Running still, but where to go?
Out of place and out of hope,
Weakness starts to befall my feet,
safety is just out of reach.
All my hopes and all my strength
now I loose as I go on.
Now I know what I must do
Sit this one out,
wait for the slaughter
for it would soon be all over!So, what do you guys think ;D
"Wasabi"Wasabi.I hate it.
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I never knew you had poets blood man. Child makes you feel as though you're in that position.
And I am honored your the first follow up poster."Fog Warning" Dr.JMy missing piece of the puzzle,you fit so perfectly into place,
yet I know I can't keep you against the turmoil I face
longing and needing your breath against mine
and the light from your face.I echo a distant time long ago,when holding hands was romantic
now a days the kids go straight to sex,like love is fanatic
I can't change the fact,I love the warmth of holding you close
and know I miss you the mostall this time I waited against the grain
hoping that that time would come
but I'm alone in the rain,
my shield,my umbrella,you protected me against the storm
I walk against the night fog,beaten and worn.
C
[quote="dedboy"]I never knew you had poets blood man. Child makes you feel as though you're in that position.
And I am honored your the first follow up poster.I was actually inspired to write Poetry back when I finally overcame my "suicidal phase" *cough* emo*cough* days back in High School & College. I found poetry as a means to express anxiety rather than to be a whiny bitch & actually go through killing myself... that & I did try on a few occasions with me failing miserably & just enduring pain, like when I slit my wrists or when I drank pills to induce an over dose.
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[quote="Cahos Rahne Veloza"]
Replying to #5
Those who do succeed, those that try overcome. You overcame to succeed. No reason to ever go back.
dedboy · #1This thread is for poems. Yep, poems. If you have one post it, allow the uses to see your daft wordplay and spectacular speech craft skills.Some rules-
**Keep the profanity to a minimum, the less the better.
**Sexual innuendos should be left somewhere else.
**Don't bash or flame someone's poetry.
**Critiquing is allowed, only constructive criticism though.
**Don't plagiarize some one elses work and claim it for your own." No Umbrella"
It's nothing I wanted to tell you
the cascading moments fleeing into the past
I never knew you wanted to know,
and I never dreamed you'd ever ask.So the questions revolve around a moment
the one that echoes why
at that time I was enveloped in misery
Post Merge: [time]1284855414[/time]dedboyI nevI echo a distant time long ago,when holding hands was romantic
now a days the kids go straight to sex,like love is fanatic
This won me the State-wide poetry contest in fifth grade, against up to sixth graders.
Spoiler: big picture
had to censor the newspaper article. On places like this you can't be reveaqling your personal I.D.
The picture's old and blurred, though so I'm not worried about that.
Wow that's fantastic personuser :)
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Replying to #9
Heh, I always liked that one. Plus the fact that our teacher made the entire class write basically the same poem/theme, and mine was the only one that even got past the first round. Other kids stole lines off of mine too.
Anyrate, all the poetry here is great.
Dug up three more from my "Emo days" archives :)PerplexedBy: C.R.VThe future for me has not yet concluded,
Have not I for see what lies before me?
On the winding road to prosperity;
Success & familiarity,
Achievement of one's most noble goal;
Attainment of familiarity,
Familiarity against prejudice;
Prejudice against reality,
Reality against imagery;
Imagery close to one's Individuality.
Ideals kept within one's mind & soul,
Kept there to inspire & adore;
Fancying bravery,
Bravery to summon courage.But what of a future when courage is barren?
Meaningless & senseless.. that what lurks there!WishfulBy: C.R.V.I wish it would be....... A war filled with insanity!
Then things wouldn't hurt;
everything just explodes, blood just squirt.
Within my chest is hurting,
As my heart has been broken!I Wish it would be......The end of all Humanity!
Then there'll be no more life to live;
No love, no joy, nothing to give,
Then I need not act as if I am happy,
as my soul is left empty.But why should it be......A Life so good & happy;
For them, 'tis a life to be cherished,
To me, its all meaningless & gloomy.It haunts deep in my heart,
Of things I never should have felt....Wishful version 2By: C.R.V.I wish I could be...... A Horse so wild & free;
A Racing stallion,
Beloved racing champion.
To them I'll never go wrong,
All bets for them I'd have won!I wish I could be......An Albatross crossing countless seas!
Covering long distances, flying freely,
Embraced by the winds, bound not actually,
Seeking new places, new counties,
Whenever my former oppresses & hinders me.But why should I be...... A man surrounded by animosity;
For me things no longer matter,
I'm merely society's lesser,
I seek not, merely as I tire,
cursed is my life, none any better!
V
A poetry thread? Oh snap.This is actually a song, but I'm too lazy to put the melody in.Count Your SheepDon't you think real life's just fantasy.
And it seems you're just another me.
Listen up, but don't believe in what you hear.
Just go to sleep, you don't need to count to 3.For everything you wanted, there's a price to pay.
And if your life's just wasted, just let it end today.
Start the fires and run now, and never will I say.
And if you really want to go to sleep.
Just close your eyes and don't forget to count your sheep.And another one.Y.O.U.It starts with M,
It ends with E.
It's me!Did you ever wonder,
Why life seems to stop and stare.
And did you ever notice,
That your friends were never there.Have you ever found things,
Were not the way they're supposed to be.
And did they ever tell you,
That it's not meant for you to see.You walk around in this broken circle of life,
You talk this talk, but you never seem to get it right.All the change in the world,
All the pacts of the past,
All the gifts of today,
It starts with Y,
It ends with U,
It's you!
H
Would you just listen and please don’t say a word, just yet,
I’d like you to think back to the very first time we met,
How you felt around me? The memories we shared,
And just remember that once upon a time, you really cared.Now think about how we parted, and how much I cried,
But please don’t speak, remember that I never ever lied,
That I told you the honest truth about why we were to split,
But now I’d like you to know that my heart broke bit by bit.The pain was deep, unbearable and painful, for so many years,
I’ll never forget all the sadness, all the uncontrollable tears,
Slowly I am rebuilding my life, I am content with what I’ve got,
And although it is hard I am beginning to forget what I have not.You were a special part of my life that I will never forget,
A part of my life that broke my heart, but that I don’t regret,
You gave me some happy memories that I’ll keep in my heart,
Although sometimes I wish that you and I didn’t have to part.You were my first love and my true love, that will always be so,
After all of the heartache, sadness and never ending pain, I know,
You and I had something special and that will never change,
Because I love you and loving someone else will always seem strange.Would you just listen and please don’t say a word, not ever,
I’d like you to remember that once upon a time, we said forever,
That I had hopes and dreams, that I was the one who threw them away,
And this is something I will always regret until my dying day.© Tara-Kay Randall 4th June 2007
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Now that one, I must admit, hit a nerve on me. Damn good work Mr. Randall[E]- Here's a new one-"Silver" Dr.JStay in these shadows,call them formal wear
Stay in silence,create your own universal tear
better to shun,than to accept
but I tell you this,it's a move you'll regretFrom where I sit,I see through you
Your wounds fester and even hurts me too
before your doors shut,you're close to being a mistress
but you shut down?,can we not do business?I can beat around the bush,but i'd rather drive up the middle
and I won't lie,I want to drink from you,just a little
slip away,only if it's into my arms
Snap,only if it's to that which does you harmDo you even understand,truthfully I think not
I'd rather have you straight,but i'll enjoy you on the rocks
pain,sorrow,sickness,and the like
will you dance with this devil,under the pale moonlight?Put your gun to my life,true it won't fire
put your body against mine,and let your sickness become my desire.
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